Good start. I think we’re actually looking into, broadly, the same subject.
I like the use of the photos already; I usually wait till later to integrate all that
Grammar, mechanics could use some polishing, but it’s early days yet. I’m sure you know it and I know it, but I needed to put something down or I’ll be asked why I didn’t. I’m sure you’ll take care of the minutiae before submission.
So the story is about Freshwater Ministries? What were they before? I’d like to know some history. Is their silent protest a radical departure for them? Or is this how they do business? Do they fall under a particular faith? Where is their actual building? Details details details. Some people would be cool too, but I assume you have your interview schedule worked up already.
Suly, You’re “putting something down” to help your colleague. What would be even more helpful than noting that a peer review is required for this class would be more specifics. Grammar and mechanics need a lot of polishing, actually. Your peer review raises good questions about reporting, but would be much stronger with some of the editing help you mention Kelly needs, but then don’t give it.
December 1, 2016 at 2:47 pm
Good start. I think we’re actually looking into, broadly, the same subject.
I like the use of the photos already; I usually wait till later to integrate all that
Grammar, mechanics could use some polishing, but it’s early days yet. I’m sure you know it and I know it, but I needed to put something down or I’ll be asked why I didn’t. I’m sure you’ll take care of the minutiae before submission.
So the story is about Freshwater Ministries? What were they before? I’d like to know some history. Is their silent protest a radical departure for them? Or is this how they do business? Do they fall under a particular faith? Where is their actual building? Details details details. Some people would be cool too, but I assume you have your interview schedule worked up already.
December 1, 2016 at 3:30 pm
Thanks for the input! Yea, I am actually looking into all of those things. Have some answers from the web and an interview coming up this weekend 🙂
December 1, 2016 at 9:27 pm
Suly, You’re “putting something down” to help your colleague. What would be even more helpful than noting that a peer review is required for this class would be more specifics. Grammar and mechanics need a lot of polishing, actually. Your peer review raises good questions about reporting, but would be much stronger with some of the editing help you mention Kelly needs, but then don’t give it.