Well done, Raffi. You use a variety of shots and sequences and you really tell a story. I would offer these technical suggestions: The first interview needs to be somewhere else (too much ambient noise, as we discussed). And I’d like to see less moving around, frankly, uninteresting classrooms and more of a photo shoot (we see the magazine itself, a lot, and it’s so vibrant and colorful – that’s a big contrast with the classrooms and meeting spaces in the films. I know that you had time constraints and that they may not have been doing actual styling and shooting?). Just be careful to adjust your audio so that the sound is even (you’re louder than your interviewees, for instance). Your script was tight and appealing and I don’t think those extra few seconds hurt. Good work.
October 19, 2016 at 2:03 am
Well done, Raffi. You use a variety of shots and sequences and you really tell a story. I would offer these technical suggestions: The first interview needs to be somewhere else (too much ambient noise, as we discussed). And I’d like to see less moving around, frankly, uninteresting classrooms and more of a photo shoot (we see the magazine itself, a lot, and it’s so vibrant and colorful – that’s a big contrast with the classrooms and meeting spaces in the films. I know that you had time constraints and that they may not have been doing actual styling and shooting?). Just be careful to adjust your audio so that the sound is even (you’re louder than your interviewees, for instance). Your script was tight and appealing and I don’t think those extra few seconds hurt. Good work.